The bulletin needs a better structure -- the live is very static and both pieces give too information to the audience too quickly, using some jargon
The live is too long
Links between the stories are needed
Add graphics and titles, as well music and credits
Lighting is good, but the sound does need some work -- you can tell the gaming centre is empty because of the background of the shot and the lack of atmospheric sounds
Final Cut:
The structure is slightly better but could use some work -- it could be simpler and use more GVs, cutaways and sequences to show the stories to our audience so they can understand the information we are telling them better
The structure is slightly improved by the added voiceover, since it helps expand on the information we have already explained
There are some minor sound issues where speech overlaps during interviews
The music and dress of the presenters helps convey the formal but inviting tone so our target audience of young people is reached, along with the graphics and background
Could have added the source information to the statistics -- needed text at the bottom that read "Source: Ofcom"
The credits could have been slower so they are easier to read
The live improved a lot since we reshot it as there is more action
Both pieces also fit the allocated durations -- at first our live was too long and our studio piece was too short
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