News: The Edit

Rough Cut:

  • The bulletin needs a better structure -- the live is very static and both pieces give too information to the audience too quickly, using some jargon
  • The live is too long
  • Links between the stories are needed
  • Add graphics and titles, as well music and credits
  • Lighting is good, but the sound does need some work -- you can tell the gaming centre is empty because of the background of the shot and the lack of atmospheric sounds

Final Cut:

  • The structure is slightly better but could use some work -- it could be simpler and use more GVs, cutaways and sequences to show the stories to our audience so they can understand the information we are telling them better
  • The structure is slightly improved by the added voiceover, since it helps expand on the information we have already explained
  • There are some minor sound issues where speech overlaps during interviews
  • The music and dress of the presenters helps convey the formal but inviting tone so our target audience of young people is reached, along with the graphics and background
  • Could have added the source information to the statistics -- needed text at the bottom that read "Source: Ofcom"
  • The credits could have been slower so they are easier to read
  • The live improved a lot since we reshot it as there is more action
  • Both pieces also fit the allocated durations -- at first our live was too long and our studio piece was too short


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